The morning after returning from Door County, I buried my grief and uncertainty by throwing myself into work; I read all the literature on bee communication, and then I called Twany.
I am thinking I am spending to much time getting to this point of the story. I am wondering if I should condense or eliminate some of the previous chapters. Thoughts? Just so you know things are going to get dark. I started writing in 2023 wondering what the near future might look like.
Good question. I think it depends on how important that buildup is to the darker turn. If it makes the contrast sharper, keep it. Otherwise, trimming could actually make it more impactful.
The pacing flows from grief, to tentative connection, to new professional hope, giving the chapter a sense of cautious forward movement.
I am thinking I am spending to much time getting to this point of the story. I am wondering if I should condense or eliminate some of the previous chapters. Thoughts? Just so you know things are going to get dark. I started writing in 2023 wondering what the near future might look like.
Good question. I think it depends on how important that buildup is to the darker turn. If it makes the contrast sharper, keep it. Otherwise, trimming could actually make it more impactful.
I’m going to imagine grandpa living it up in a bee oasis ❤️🩹 Yay for bee communication, but the government being involved makes me nervous…